Type Poster Process

[joeylponce]

Been on gigposters for a few weeks now and haven't really participated in discussion much, so i'm going for it. Going to start working on a quick, personal project—a "for the hell of it" type thing—that should document my process enough. I'm open to feedback, criticism, and the like.

Here's the idea. A small poster, typographic, thinking 3-4 colors, but not sure yet. That'll be decided when I get the type down solid.

Here's the first sketch:
"I'll give you my moonshine, if you show me your jugs."

[joeylponce]

Cleaned up the sketch to a more refined version. Still have some spacing and lines I want to work out...

[zlandrum]

Looks great. needsmoarjuggz.

[joeylponce]

After looking at this for a while, I'm having some thoughts.
I've got "I'll give you my moonshine, if you show me your jugs."
Considering a verbiage change to:
"I'll give you some moonshine, if you bring me your jugs."
Any thoughts?

[Kotah]

Howabout: "You must be the daughter of a moonshiner, cause you've got a great set of jugs."
It's like a pick up line type poster.

[joeylponce]

Thanks for the recommendation. I was hoping to stick to changing the two words, mostly for the sake of keeping the set-up I have now and just replacing them, but I do like the more direct line, too. I may try drawing that one up separately. Anyway, I think I'm going to change the line to the "I'll give you some moonshine, if you bring me your jugs." for now. Then start adding some texture to the letters, some dimension, and figuring out my colors for it. I'm thinking a woodgrain on the type, putting some "thickness" to them, and going from there. Possibly a background. Possibly.

More criticisms/recommendations would help. Specifically on the style of the type. Thanks guys.

By the way, Kotah: Looked through your site and love your work. Hope things continue going well for you.

[Josh Rickun]

i think combining handcrafted and ornate type with something as stupid as the first draft is far more powerful than trying to make it clever.

[joeylponce]

i think combining handcrafted and ornate type with something as stupid as the first draft is far more powerful than trying to make it clever.

What do you mean by "as stupid as the first draft"? Do you mean the wording? Keep it the way it is? Or the dirty sketchy quality of it?
What I understand is: make the type look really ornate and decorative, solid and well illustrated, but keep the wording the way it is at "I'll give you my moonshine, if you show me your jugs."

Thanks for the feedback, by the way

[Josh Rickun]

yeah i mean the wording, not the look

[Graphic D.]

We don't call it "Moonshine" down heunh. We call it 'Shine and them ain't jugs son. They're Titties.